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Alexithymia

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Exquisitely incoherent -
my thoughts are raced:
rapidly rushing through my mind,
unclear and paced.

I avert my gaze;
I didn't notice myself staring
as my mind is in a blinding daze
of intoxicating fireworks and the sun's rays.

Vivid butterflies swooping by,
as snowflakes fall from the melancholy sky...
waves of water wash out my sight
as the bitter wind begins to bite.

Perfectly mocking - my thoughts turn sour,
but I am not about to cower!
I open my eyes and am forced to see
the craziness of the feeling inside me.
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I really liked how you conveyed lots of different feelings without giving their names because that's how I think alexithymia must feel like - alexithymic patients feel just as lots as like just anyone else but yet they are unable to notice, name or identify their feelings, as though they were somehow not going through their perception filters. I sometimes wonder whether Tarsjusz wasn't alexithimic because he would usually pick just the worst matching description to whatever feeling he was showing non-verbally. The disorder intrigues me therefore. I think the confusion that must be associated with that state ("Exquisitely incoherent", "I didn't notice myself staring", contrast between butterflies and snowflakes) is also conveyed really well. I like that it rhymes, although I think that more regular rhythm and rhyming scheme would make the poem flow better. Also, I wonder about usage of the melancholy word, because considering that the lyrical subject is alexithymic, I highly doubt they would figure out ascribing melancholy to the sky xD But I don't know. I'm not alexithimc. Those people seem to be like a box of secrets to me :)